Essay 2 Draft 1

  A powerful, recurring emotional theme is played out through lives every day. The types of food eaten act as a mirror into our emotional state of mind. Preference dictates the specific type of meal established for each emotional occasion. With so many unique opportunities food offers, specific types of food have come to represent certain emotional aspects in life, with the capacity vary culture to culture, family to family. The universal celebration of life is often stapled around a specific person’s interests, with a day dedicated wholly to them. Birthday cake is a regularly customized treat specifically for the recipient, a representation of love and happiness felt by the presenters. Raymond Carver’s A Small, Good Thing follows this well-known tradition as “she ordered chocolate, the child’s favorite. The cake she chose was decorated with a space ship and launching pad under a sprinkling of white stars, and a planet made of red frosting at the ether end. His name, Scotty, [Read more...]

Journal 11: TS/IS The Art of Summarizing

I never thought that a summary should include both what the original author is saying WITH the writer’s own focus. I think that’s a really good way of telling the writer that you have to include both what you read and what you’re trying to say, instead of just all of one or all of the other. I also tend to include what the original author says, with little explanation as to how or why the information relates to my own writing, so just something like that is a good thing to keep in mind when summarizing other work.             Being an unbiased summarizer is a very difficult thing to do, so to see these writers call it “the believing game” is an interesting way of putting it. Even relating it to an actor/actress, who must completely become a new person is a great way to really exemplify what they’re trying to tell us about summarizing: that you must believe what your trying to summarize. Because if you begin to put in your own thoughts/beliefs/opinions, it no longer is someone [Read more...]

Journal 10: A Small Good Thing

  It seems that food is the ultimate gift in times of trauma and sorrow. At hospitals, at funerals, whenever and wherever there is sadness and grief and desolation food makes an entrance. Perhaps it’s because we know it takes time to make food, so we want to play our part in taking the time out of our nontrauma lives to give the traumatees ones less thing to worry about, making food. Or maybe it’s the only way we know of to say, Sorry for what you’re going through. Food is also one of the only natural ways to keep up our strength. In times of trauma and sorrow, we need all of the strength (both emotional and physical) to get through the rough times brought upon us. That’s why people are always told to eat, eat, eat during sadness. Or maybe it’s because it gives us something to do with our time while we wait, wait, wait to hear the news and feel powerless to do anything.   The title “A Small, Good Thing” is one of the sentences the baker tells the Weiss family after [Read more...]

Journal 9

  I spent the most time revising the structure of my essay. I always have a strong idea as to what I want to write about and the type of writing I’m going to commit to throughout the entirety of my papers. Usually, I begin with a paper outline of the topics and the main points I desire to touch upon, then ceremoniously stick to that single structure throughout my entire paper. This time, however, with spending so much time on a single essay, I found that the structure I had envisioned originally was not what was handed in in the end. After peer reviews and comments/ideas I found that there was a better way to structure my essay that would allow for the ideas to flow much more smoothly, not only for my ideas and concepts but for the reader to follow as well. I found the revised structure of me essay to be much more effective and efficient than the first.             After completing the essay, I found there was not a lot about it that I desire to change. My content touched upon [Read more...]

Favorite Meal Essay Draft 2

Deanna Phipps Professor Jessie Miller Eng. 110 H4 22 February 2017 Dish of Life Morning sunlight streams through the large bay window nestled behind the dining room table, countless dust motes twirling through the air. Below rests five sets of empty plates, napkins and glasses filled with cold orange juice or milk, idly perspiring in the warm morning air.  My two sisters and I, along with our mother, sit hungrily before the prepared table. It’s Saturday morning and almost time to eat. The source of the excitement, the reason we’re all sitting at the table, comes marching around the corner. Dad is dressed in his classic flannel pajama bottoms and white crew neck, spotted with grease and flour from his kitchen endeavors. A plate of perfectly crisped bacon resides in his right hand, while his left balances a precariously balanced stack of perfect golden pancakes. Upon quick inspection, I expertly determine which pancakes are graced with chocolate chips. Eager hands reach [Read more...]

Journal 8

23 February 2017 This chapter in They Say/ I say really helped me remember the importance of continuously including the relevance of a connection between two topics. I sometimes forget that, while talking, the reader may forget the importance of my topic and/or relevant connections it may have. Including those return sentences has always been something that I’ve struggled with, because I feel that in using them I’m too often repeating myself. Which then leads me to ask the authors of this academic writing novel, please be sure to include ALL information about these examples and structures of writing. I feel that they forget to answer all of the basic “who, what, when, where, why, how” models. For this chapter, I feel like they never explained WHEN a good time to use these templates are. How should I lead up to them? How should I follow? I feel like by providing these templates they’re narrowing the options of follow-up sentences, since explaining something so structured has its [Read more...]

Favorite Meal Essay Draft 1

Deanna Phipps Jessie Mullin Eng. 110 H4 15 February 2017 Papa’s Pancakes Morning sunlight streams through the large bay window nestled behind the dining room table, countless dust moats twirling through the air. Below them rest five sets of empty plates and napkins and glasses filled with cold orange juice or milk, idly perspiring in the warm morning air.  My two sisters and I, along with our mother, sit hungrily before the prepared table; it’s Saturday morning and almost time to eat. The source of the excitement, the reason we’re all sitting at the table, comes marching around the corner. Dad is dressed in his classic flannel pajama bottoms and white crew neck, spotted with grease and powder from his kitchen endeavors. Wielding the fruits of his labor, a plate of perfectly crisped bacon resides in his right hand, while his left balances a precariously staked plate of perfect golden pancakes. Upon a quick inspection, I expertly determine which pancakes are graced with [Read more...]